December 9th, 2008, 1:00 am

There's Something Wrong 3

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December 9th, 2008, 12:00 am

It was my birthday yesterday. So I recorded this

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y7mauE-rbp8

Oh yeah, this is a comic thing

September 26th, 2017, 5:49 am

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December 9th, 2008, 8:34 am

birthdays suck, you get old and die.
happy birfday!

December 9th, 2008, 4:53 pm

It's a Yamaha, and it is very old and green.

March 18th, 2009, 3:27 am

Again, the outlines are killing me. No sense of structure at all. And the body switch plot? Kinda played out. Especially when the characters are so barely defined. Maybe if this arc came later in the story, after it was more established how their lives and personalities were different, it would have more impact. Also, the different computer and existence of Allison are pretty much coming out of no where. You should have set up those facts earlier on.

In panel 3, did you just forget to write "Why" at the beginning of the sentence, or are you intentionally starting it with a lower case letter? And what the heck is going on in panel 4? Where is his face? Or, if that's supposed to be a POV shot, where is the rest of the room? In panel 5, you should put a bit more effort into the background lines so that they radiate more smoothly and directly from his face. As is, they just look like a mess.

March 18th, 2009, 7:30 pm

I'LL FACTS YOU

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